Wednesday, May 6, 2015

Wordy Wednesday: Footprints


Today's word prompt is "Footprints" submitted by B-A-R (Blog-A-Rhythm) member, writer, and blogger Shilpa Halwe: http://shilpaview-ideas2.blogspot.in/.

My story today is a word prompt challenge (https://blogarhythmblog.wordpress.com/2015/05/06/wordy-wednesday-1-may-2015-prompt/).

I decided unwittingly to write today - still Wednesday - as a pantser in the same spirit of Shilpa's writings, fiction, still a relatively new genre for me. In only about five minutes I wrote the following piece below.
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She snuggled in her father's arms and dreamed whilst he read her a story. Her eyelids drooping heavily from a fun-filled day of playing around in the snow, building a snowman, tobogganing, having a snowball fight, and the like. It was after all the first day of snow!

How could she not when her playmate was her beloved father whom she adored and worshipped. He was her idol, one whom she trusted and admired with all her heart. Her mother died while she was quite young and her father chose to raise his little girl by himself.

As time continued, the stirrings in her heart remained and yet it also changed. Though it wasn't spoken of as yet, the desire to do something great and be someone admired and respected like her father dawned upon her.

She decided she wanted to leave a mark, her mark in the world. It was her footprints which she left behind that mattered the most to her in her life.
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  1. Battered HopeMay 7, 2015 at 12:09 AM

    Beautifully said Elly. It is exactly the way I feel about my Daddy and I miss him everyday but want to make him proud and follow in his footprints!

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 7, 2015 at 10:48 AM

      Thanks, and Wow: who would have known that I channelled your feelings? ;) I am sure you "done your Dad" proud Carol as you are such an inspiration and empower others to live better lives. <3

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  2. LsMay 7, 2015 at 3:28 AM

    You make me miss my Papa. Thank God, he will be here tomorrow. I am very much following in his footprints.

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 7, 2015 at 10:49 AM

      Oh my! I can't believe my fiction story is touching people at such a deep level! I hope you have a heartwarming visit. :) And great that you are following in his footprints by the sound that he is a great man! ;) <3

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  3. sunaina sharmaMay 7, 2015 at 5:20 AM

    Wow Elly....you reminded me of my father whom I miss so much......the many moments spent with him are cherished treasures.....thanks for sharing this....

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 7, 2015 at 10:50 AM

      Oh wow and yet again! I am blown away - you are the third person thus far who is 'missing' their father. I didn't realize the effect my nonfiction story would have! Thanks for your comments Sunaina. :) <3

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  4. ParulMay 7, 2015 at 5:54 AM

    That's so beautiful Elly! Loved every word of it!

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 7, 2015 at 10:51 AM

      Thanks Parul, I appreciate your kind words. :) <3

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  5. AnonymousMay 7, 2015 at 8:10 AM

    Beautifully written, Elly! Missing my Dad now. Thank God he will drop by on Sunday! Yay! :)

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 7, 2015 at 10:51 AM

      Thanks TOTT! ;) I am glad you will be visiting with home very soon: enjoy your visit together! :) <3

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  6. UnknownMay 7, 2015 at 10:30 AM

    I think we all want to make our folks proud. I try not to think on it too much because I think mine would be a bit disappointed in me.

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 7, 2015 at 10:53 AM

      For sure Kathy, for sure! :) Oh, I am so sorry to hear and I hope in your heart you are able to change your belief. I know only little of you through your writings; however, they are so much appreciated by many, including myself! :) I would hope you would at least feel proud of yourself and your accomplishments Kathy. <3

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    2. Ajay PaiMay 10, 2015 at 7:52 AM

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    3. Ajay PaiMay 10, 2015 at 7:54 AM

      @Kathy Combs Hello Kathy! I have seen your pic with two of adorable kids. Am sure, that you are a lovely Mom to them. Cheer up. You have already left a mark through your kids. They have grown up in such a perfect way

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  7. Shilpa GargMay 7, 2015 at 8:38 PM

    Aha! Daddy's little girl all set to make him proud! Nicely penned, Elly :)

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  9. RachnaMay 7, 2015 at 10:08 PM

    This is beautifully done, Elly. I am daddy's girl too.

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 8, 2015 at 11:18 PM

      I'm glad you enjoyed reading this post Rachna. :) Thanks for your comment. <3

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  10. AditiMay 8, 2015 at 1:44 AM

    Elly, really beautiful!! :)

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 8, 2015 at 11:19 PM

      Thanks Aditi! :) I appreciate you reading my post and your comment, albeit even if it is short! ;) <3

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  11. Beloo MehraMay 9, 2015 at 2:15 AM

    I think many daughters can connect with this lovely story, Elly! Something so tenderly beautiful about a father-daughter bond.

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 9, 2015 at 9:54 PM

      Thanks Beloo: I appreciate your words. :) So beautifully expressed! ;) <3

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  12. Somali K ChakrabartiMay 10, 2015 at 9:53 AM

    Very nicely written. I could relate with the feeling of comfort and safety in my fathers arms when I was a kid- something that mostly all little girls cherish but the expression changes over time.

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 10, 2015 at 12:49 PM

      Thanks Somali. :) I am glad you can relate to this post (though you needn't of course) as it brought up fond memories for you. <3

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  13. VinodiniMay 10, 2015 at 3:51 PM

    Beautiful Elly! Every daddy's girl would relate to this. You do want him to be proud of you :) Enjoyed a piece of fiction by you after a long time <3

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 10, 2015 at 8:31 PM

      Thanks Vinnie, glad you enjoyed it. :) I guess I need to write fiction more often then, hey? ;) <3

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  14. Ajay PaiMay 10, 2015 at 4:53 PM

    Hi Elly, this short story which you have narrated is indeed very touching and definitely an empowering write-up. Especially for the reason, that you have depicted a girl child who is longing to leave a mark of her own in this male-dominated world, hence I find this write-up very much empowering.
    Thanks for the thought and the write-up.

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 10, 2015 at 8:32 PM

      Thanks Ajay! I appreciate your comments, especially your explanation for it. :) <3

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  15. Swathi ShenoyMay 10, 2015 at 8:19 PM

    Beautiful Elly :) We all have that desire to leave footprints in this world and make our dear ones proud :) Nice take on the prompt :)

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 10, 2015 at 8:33 PM

      We sure do, don't we...for sure! ;) I am glad you enjoyed reading my post. Thanks for your comment. :) <3

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  16. Shilpa GupteMay 11, 2015 at 9:54 AM

    That was such a wonderful thought by the little girl! We all have the desire to do something that the world will admire and respect, leave behind our footprints for others to follow, and follow the footprints left behind by our parents. And, that is exactly what I try to do! :)) Loved reading the post, Elly! Thank you! <3

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 11, 2015 at 1:37 PM

      I love how you express that Shilpa: "...our footprints...and follow the footprints...: - a dual process! ;) I appreciate your comments and that you loved reading the post Shilpa. :) <3

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  17. VinithaMay 11, 2015 at 10:46 PM

    Beautiful story, Elly. Loved reading it. :)

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 11, 2015 at 11:44 PM

      Thanks Vinitha. :) Glad that you enjoyed reading it. :) <3

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  18. SoumyaMay 11, 2015 at 11:45 PM

    This was so beautiful Elly! Her father would have been so proud of her :)

    Loved reading it and I wish someday I can be such a daughter to my papa as well <3

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    1. elly stornebrinkMay 11, 2015 at 11:49 PM

      Aw shucks Soumya! You almost make me blush! ;) Thanks for your sweet comments! :) And yes, I hope you do, if not already! :) <3

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